Your analysis of Dorian's picture as a symbols is both very thoughtful and very thought-provoking. I feel that this was a very good choice in prompt, symbols clearly play an important part in Wildes writing, so this really lets us see the best of Wilde. I of course have not read "The Picture of Dorian Grey" but I feel like I can understand the essence of what Wilde is trying to do with it. Mostly as a result of your claim that Dorian's picture represents the idea that "outside beauty will not fulfill your life, morals must be present as well." and your second clam that the picture represents that death can't be escaped.
Your conclusion is also very strong. I like how you tie everything together by saying that "The Picture of Dorian Grey" is itself a picture into the lifestyle of the 1800's. Which lends it extra meaning in that it's not just symbolic in-novel, but in real life as well. Good work with this essay, I feel like you quite accurately have shown us a major part of Wildes style.
I used this exact same prompt for one of my essays, but it seems to fit your subject much better. The portrait makes for a very clear symbol of immorality, as you said in your essay. The essay itself was well written besides a few grammatical errors. You got your point across very easily and addressed the prompt fully. It was also very easy to find and understand your thesis. The only thing I might suggest to you is that you switch the second and third body paragraphs. Because that second paragraph talks about Dorian’s suicide, it feels like an end, thus making the third paragraph feel unexpected and almost unnecessary. You are essentially killing off a main subject of the essay in the second paragraph, then bringing him back to life in the third. This can come off as a little confusing to readers. One more piece of advice, make sure you do not repeat yourself in your essays. Although you did not quite get there in this essay, you came very close to it. This must have been hard to accomplish in this essay, however, because it is clear that the portrait’s symbolism is very obviously defined and unambiguous. This is what makes it a prime example for the 2009 prompt you used. The essay was well written and refreshingly simple, stating exactly what you needed to say.
Your analysis of Dorian's picture as a symbols is both very thoughtful and very thought-provoking. I feel that this was a very good choice in prompt, symbols clearly play an important part in Wildes writing, so this really lets us see the best of Wilde. I of course have not read "The Picture of Dorian Grey" but I feel like I can understand the essence of what Wilde is trying to do with it. Mostly as a result of your claim that Dorian's picture represents the idea that "outside beauty will not fulfill your life, morals must be present as well." and your second clam that the picture represents that death can't be escaped.
ReplyDeleteYour conclusion is also very strong. I like how you tie everything together by saying that "The Picture of Dorian Grey" is itself a picture into the lifestyle of the 1800's. Which lends it extra meaning in that it's not just symbolic in-novel, but in real life as well. Good work with this essay, I feel like you quite accurately have shown us a major part of Wildes style.
I used this exact same prompt for one of my essays, but it seems to fit your subject much better. The portrait makes for a very clear symbol of immorality, as you said in your essay. The essay itself was well written besides a few grammatical errors. You got your point across very easily and addressed the prompt fully. It was also very easy to find and understand your thesis.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I might suggest to you is that you switch the second and third body paragraphs. Because that second paragraph talks about Dorian’s suicide, it feels like an end, thus making the third paragraph feel unexpected and almost unnecessary. You are essentially killing off a main subject of the essay in the second paragraph, then bringing him back to life in the third. This can come off as a little confusing to readers. One more piece of advice, make sure you do not repeat yourself in your essays. Although you did not quite get there in this essay, you came very close to it. This must have been hard to accomplish in this essay, however, because it is clear that the portrait’s symbolism is very obviously defined and unambiguous. This is what makes it a prime example for the 2009 prompt you used. The essay was well written and refreshingly simple, stating exactly what you needed to say.